Some good writing here Seb - shame you only got two done. I think the way you play around with expectations in the coming out one is good: although I do think you picked a somewhat stereotyped, non-macho football hating boy, I like the reversal of expectations around the dad. Can you change the title to incude 'Dialogue Practice' please. The break-up has some chilling hints of control and abuse.
Some good writing here Seb - shame you only got two done. I think the way you play around with expectations in the coming out one is good: although I do think you picked a somewhat stereotyped, non-macho football hating boy, I like the reversal of expectations around the dad. Can you change the title to incude 'Dialogue Practice' please. The break-up has some chilling hints of control and abuse.
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